Learning Intention : W.A.L.T-write a recount.
Success Criteria- I know I can do this when I write my story in order,and use capital letters and full stops correctly.
Last Friday I was fishing with my big brother by the river.
We heard a very loud scream.A six years old girl fell in the super cold water.She was shouting loud for help.I dashed in the freezing water and pulled her out with my clothes on. I was shivering because of the cold and freezing water.
I was breathing hard because Emily was very heavy to pull. Emily was breathing hard too,because she was scared to drown.
Later, Emily's mother said to me'' Thank you for saving my daughter''.I said'' you're welcome''.
We heard a very loud scream.A six years old girl fell in the super cold water.She was shouting loud for help.I dashed in the freezing water and pulled her out with my clothes on. I was shivering because of the cold and freezing water.
I was breathing hard because Emily was very heavy to pull. Emily was breathing hard too,because she was scared to drown.
Later, Emily's mother said to me'' Thank you for saving my daughter''.I said'' you're welcome''.
what a lovely story, son! You are such a brave man to save Emily. Keep up the good work, August.
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Thanks Mum
DeleteHi Augustine its Brielle here I just want to say what a lovely story you got there and I like the way that you put in the name of the person that you writing about.Good Job Keep up the good work August.
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